Great work on this story, Eddie. I really like how transitioned to each different scene. This line really stood out to me: "Vee looked up at me like I sucked the breath right from her lungs."
Great storyline,Eddie. Kept my interest right down to the last paragraph!!! I would love to see what direction you would take this in a series of short stories! Give it some consideration…for your Dad!!!!
Great work on this story, Eddie. I really like how transitioned to each different scene. This line really stood out to me: "Vee looked up at me like I sucked the breath right from her lungs."
Thanks for reading, Ben.
Great storyline,Eddie. Kept my interest right down to the last paragraph!!! I would love to see what direction you would take this in a series of short stories! Give it some consideration…for your Dad!!!!
Great idea, Dad!